考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well.On the one hand,what I have

　　studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered.On

　　the other hand,I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work

　　or the daily life. Besides,I have worked as a parttime staff in the IBM.So I reckon

　　that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly.Whats more,

　　enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of my informationis presented.

　　Finally,it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being

　　interviewed so that I can further express myself.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in(用on) your website.

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime(part-time) staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. Whats more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of(去掉，detail是個(gè)及物動(dòng)詞)my informationis(拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤)presented(這個(gè)詞用在這里想要表達(dá)什么呢?現(xiàn)在的信息應(yīng)該是present information).Finally,(這個(gè)詞建議去掉) it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：8-9分寫(xiě)的很不錯(cuò)!條理清楚，內(nèi)容充實(shí)。注意以上幾個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)性的問(wèn)題。

　　考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well.On the one hand,what I have

　　studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered.On

　　the other hand,I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work

　　or the daily life. Besides,I have worked as a parttime staff in the IBM.So I reckon

　　that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly.Whats more,

　　enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of my informationis presented.

　　Finally,it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being

　　interviewed so that I can further express myself.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in(用on) your website.

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime(part-time) staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. Whats more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of(去掉，detail是個(gè)及物動(dòng)詞)my informationis(拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤)presented(這個(gè)詞用在這里想要表達(dá)什么呢?現(xiàn)在的信息應(yīng)該是present information).Finally,(這個(gè)詞建議去掉) it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：8-9分寫(xiě)的很不錯(cuò)!條理清楚，內(nèi)容充實(shí)。注意以上幾個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)性的問(wèn)題。