I am writing to apply for the positing of Internet administrators you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL.

　　To briefly introduce myself ,I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy majoring in computing adminitration and expect graduation this June.Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration.My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post.

　　I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience.

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear sir or madam, I am writing to apply for the positing(position) of Internet administrators(用單數(shù)，因?yàn)槟闵暾?qǐng)的是一個(gè)人的一個(gè)職位) you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL. To briefly introduce myself, I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy(這里表達(dá)的太復(fù)雜了，去掉這一部分，或者是說XX department) majoring in computing adminitration(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，administration) and expect graduation this June. Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration. My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post. I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗號(hào)) Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：7分寫的還不錯(cuò)。需要加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)能力。

　　I am writing to apply for the positing of Internet administrators you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL.

　　To briefly introduce myself ,I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy majoring in computing adminitration and expect graduation this June.Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration.My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post.

　　I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience.

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear sir or madam, I am writing to apply for the positing(position) of Internet administrators(用單數(shù)，因?yàn)槟闵暾?qǐng)的是一個(gè)人的一個(gè)職位) you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL. To briefly introduce myself, I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy(這里表達(dá)的太復(fù)雜了，去掉這一部分，或者是說XX department) majoring in computing adminitration(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，administration) and expect graduation this June. Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration. My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post. I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗號(hào)) Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：7分寫的還不錯(cuò)。需要加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)能力。