一、避免使用語(yǔ)意弱的be動(dòng)詞。

　　1.把句中的表語(yǔ)轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語(yǔ)。例如：

　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.

　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape.

　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green.

　　2.將作表語(yǔ)用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞。例如：

　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.

　　Revision: The team members play well.

　　2) Weak: One workers plan is the elimination of tardiness.

　　Revision: One workers plan eliminates tardiness.

　　3.在以here或there開(kāi)頭的句子中，把be動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫(xiě)句的主語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

　　二、多用語(yǔ)意具體的動(dòng)詞，保持句意簡(jiǎn)潔明了。例如：

　　1. Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

　　Better: My supervisor sauntered past my desk.

　　2. Poor: She is a careful shopper.

　　Better: She compares prices and quality.

　　三、盡量運(yùn)用主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。例如：

　　1. Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.

　　2. Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

　　四、防止使用語(yǔ)意冗長(zhǎng)累贅的詞語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1. Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

　　2. Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

　　3. Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　4. Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

　　五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語(yǔ)或難懂的專(zhuān)業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1. Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.

　　2. Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.

　　一、避免使用語(yǔ)意弱的be動(dòng)詞。

　　1.把句中的表語(yǔ)轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語(yǔ)。例如：

　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.

　　Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape.

　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green.

　　2.將作表語(yǔ)用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞。例如：

　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.

　　Revision: The team members play well.

　　2) Weak: One workers plan is the elimination of tardiness.

　　Revision: One workers plan eliminates tardiness.

　　3.在以here或there開(kāi)頭的句子中，把be動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫(xiě)句的主語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

　　二、多用語(yǔ)意具體的動(dòng)詞，保持句意簡(jiǎn)潔明了。例如：

　　1. Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

　　Better: My supervisor sauntered past my desk.

　　2. Poor: She is a careful shopper.

　　Better: She compares prices and quality.

　　三、盡量運(yùn)用主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。例如：

　　1. Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.

　　2. Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

　　四、防止使用語(yǔ)意冗長(zhǎng)累贅的詞語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1. Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

　　2. Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

　　3. Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　4. Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

　　五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語(yǔ)或難懂的專(zhuān)業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ)。例如：

　　1. Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.

　　2. Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.